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2 Essay and Paragraph Review

Mary V Cantrell

Learning Objectives

  • Write a clear thesis statement that unifies your essay
  • Organize sentences around a topic sentence in a body paragraph
  • Create smooth transitions in a paragraph

Basic Essay Structure

Most likely, if you’re a first-semester college student, the last time you had to write an essay was in high school. High school essay writing typically emphasizes the five-paragraph essay: introduction, three body paragraphs, and a conclusion. If you’ve been out of high school for a while or if you struggled with essay writing in high school, this chapter will help you review this basic structure, which can serve as a foundation for your college-level essays.

The outline below in Figure 3.1 is probably what you’ve been taught about essay structure. The introduction starts with a general statement–often a “hook” or statement that grabs the readers’ attention–and gradually narrows to a thesis. Typically, the thesis is the last sentence in the opening, and it tells the readers what the essay is all about. In this format, the thesis uses that magic number of three: three reasons why a statement is true. Each of those reasons is explained and justified in the three body paragraphs, and then the conclusion restates the thesis before gradually getting broader and leaving the readers with something memorable.

 

Figure 3.1 The traditional five-paragraph essay structure

All that time you spent mastering the five-paragraph form in Figure 3.1 was not wasted; the structure can help you organize your thinking into an easy-to-follow structure. In a college-level writing class, though, you’ll be expected to do much more with this basic formula. The video below explains the basic five-paragraph essay structure and how you will be expected to develop a more sophisticated approach to writing for your college classes.

So, What’s Different About College Essays?

As the video explained, the five-paragraph essay formula does not guarantee you will write a focused, organized, compelling essay. The “more organic” structure proposed in the video offers a less rigid approach, one that requires you to make good choices about what to include and how to structure your ideas. In college as in real-world situations, the way you present your ideas in writing has much to do with the “rhetorical situation,” or the circumstances that prompt the writing. Different rhetorical situations require different approaches, and you are expected to figure out the best approach. A first-year college writing class, therefore, helps you learn to adapt the five-paragraph structure to the various rhetorical situations you encounter and to develop the thinking and writing skills that you can use no matter what the rhetorical situation is.

Think of the five-paragraph essay as similar to a coloring book: for the five-paragraph essay, you plug in some ideas just as for a coloring book, you plug in some colors. If you were taking an art class to learn to draw, it’s highly unlikely that your instructor would want you to learn by coloring in a coloring book. Similarly, in a college writing class, your professor doesn’t want you to learn to write by following the rigid structure of the five-paragraph essay. Needless to say, writing is more difficult when you’re not simply following a formula just as drawing or painting is more difficult than coloring in a coloring book.

That doesn’t mean, though, that learning the five-paragraph structure was a waste of time. The general structure can be adapted to many college writing situations, and sometimes–an essay exam, for example–the five-paragraph structure is just what you need. You will still have all of the features of a five-paragraph essay; you just need to think about these features differently.

What’s Different About the Thesis?

In most college classes, when you’re asked to write a paper, your professor expects you to come up with a thesis and to support that thesis in well-developed paragraphs. The definition of a thesis statement that you (probably) learned in high school applies: the thesis is the main point, the gist of your paper. For a college class, though, the thesis usually does more than simply announce the main idea of your essay. A good thesis is an original idea or opinion that you’ve developed by studying, reading, and thinking critically about your topic. A good thesis statement conveys your purpose for writing and previews what’s coming in your essay. In addition, a college-level thesis meets these criteria:

  1. A good thesis is non-obvious. High school teachers needed to make sure that you and all your classmates mastered the basic form of the academic essay. Thus, they were mostly concerned that you had a clear and consistent thesis, even if it was something obvious like “sustainability is important.” A thesis statement like that has a wide-enough scope to incorporate several supporting points and concurring evidence, enabling the writer to demonstrate his or her mastery of the five-paragraph form. Good enough for high school! When they can, high school teachers nudge students to develop arguments that are less obvious, more original, and more engaging. College instructors, on the other hand, always expect you to produce something more sophisticated and specific. They also want you to go beyond the obvious and offer your original thinking about a topic, and they almost always want the thesis to reflect what you’re learning in their classes. To write a good thesis, therefore, you need to engage with the course material and understand the professor’s expectations. You also shouldn’t expect to come up with a thesis and stick with it throughout the writing process. Most writers think through several possible thesis statements before they begin writing, and they revise their thesis statements as they work on their essays. Writing about a topic helps them discover more interesting, specific points to make about the topic. A good thesis reflects good critical thinking and an original perspective. 
  2. A good thesis is arguable. In everyday life, “arguable” is often used as a synonym for “controversial.” For a thesis, though, “arguable” doesn’t mean highly opinionated, and the goal of an academic essay isn’t necessarily to convert every reader to your way of thinking. As the French essayist Joseph Jourbert said, “The aim of argument…should not be victory but progress,” meaning we present arguments to expand our thinking about a topic. A good thesis, therefore, offers readers a new idea, a new perspective, or an opinion about a topic. The need to be arguable dovetails with the need to be specific:  only when we have deeply explored a problem can we arrive at an original and specific argument that legitimately needs 3, 5, 10, or 20 pages to explain and justify. In that way, a good thesis sets an ambitious agenda for a paper.
  3. A good thesis is specific. You don’t want to set too ambitious an agenda, though! Some student writers fear that they won’t have enough to write about if they present a specific thesis, so they attempt to cover too much. A thesis like “sustainability is important” may seem like a great thesis because one could write all of the reasons for why it’s important, but the vague language invites a superficial discussion of a complicated topic. A thesis like “sustainability policies will inevitably fail if they do not incorporate social justice” limits the scope of the discussion, which in turn means that the essay itself will provide a more in-depth discussion of sustainability policies. It could even be more specific: which sustainability policies?

More than anything, a good thesis grows out of your carefully study of what others have written or said about a topic as well as your own critical thinking about that topic. Gone are the days when you can re-hash the arguments or ideas of others and earn an A. Your college professors expect your thesis to do much more.

What’s Different About Body Paragraphs?

Think back to when you first learned to write paragraphs. Maybe you learned that paragraphs are supposed to have a certain number of sentences, or maybe you learned an acronym for what a paragraph is, such as the P. I. E. paragraph format (P=point, I=information, E=explanation). Some students learn to write paragraphs that follow certain patterns, such as narrative or compare/contrast. Whatever you learned about paragraphs, you probably remember that paragraphs need to include a topic sentence, supporting information, smooth transitions from one sentence to the next, and a concluding sentence, and each body paragraph in an essay needs to support the thesis statement.

All of that remains true for college-level writing, and your professors will judge your paragraphs on how well they meet these general criteria for a paragraph; in other words, they’ll want to see paragraphs that are organized, unified around a single point or idea, developed with specific evidence, and related to the thesis. The difference is that meeting the criteria for good paragraphs is much more difficult because of what goes into the paragraphs–namely, your own thinking and learning. You’re also expected to develop a more sophisticated means of organizing the information within paragraphs, to develop your ideas using information you’ve gathered from extensive research into the paragraphs, and to create a smooth progression of sentences within your paragraphs so that your readers can follow your thinking.

In short, you will be expected to build upon what you know about writing paragraphs, so take a few minutes to review the features of a good paragraph:

Topic Sentences

The main idea of the paragraph is stated in the topic sentence. A good topic sentence does the following:

  • introduces the rest of the paragraph
  • contains both a topic and an idea or opinion about that topic
  • is clear and easy to follow
  • does not include supporting details
  • engages the reader

For example:

Development of the Alaska oil fields threaten the already-endangered Northern Sea Otters.

This sentence introduces the topic and the writer’s opinion. After reading this sentence, a reader might reasonably expect the writer to go on to provide supporting details and facts about what the threat is. The sentence is clear and the word choice is interesting.

Here is another example:

Many major league baseball players have cheated by “corking” their bats.

Again, the topic and opinion are clear and specific, the details (what is corking? which players?) are saved for later, and the word choice is powerful.

Now look at this example:

I think everyone should be able to take a pet, especially service pets, to work because they provide comfort, and the potential problems they might cause can be eliminated if companies develop good policies.

Even though the topic and opinion are evident, the sentence is not focused or specific. It’s not likely that the writer could provide enough support to argue that every place of employment, from McDonald’s to a law office, should allow any kind of pets, from service dogs to parakeets. Furthermore, the writer is also offering two points that need to be discussed:  pets provide comfort and pets don’t cause problems. Most likely, each of these points needs to be addressed in a separate paragraph.

The writer could revise the topic sentence into two topic sentences:

  1. Being able to bring a dog or cat to the office can be comforting to people who work at a desk from 9:00-5:00.
  2. Specific policies and practices can eliminate some of the problems that might occur if employees are allowed to bring pets to the office.

These two paragraphs might appear in an essay arguing that people should be able to take their pets in public more often. The topic sentence would clearly support such a thesis, which would need many more paragraphs of support.

Typically, you should place the topic sentence at the beginning of the paragraph. In college and business writing, readers often lose patience if they are unable to quickly grasp what the writer is trying to say. Topic sentences make the writer’s basic point easy to locate and understand.

Developing the Topic Sentence

The body of a paragraph contains supporting details to help explain, prove, or expand the topic sentence. Often, in attempting to support a topic sentence with plenty of supporting details, writers discover that they need two paragraphs to support one point. For example, consider the following topic sentence, which might appear in an essay about reforming social security.

For many older Americans, retiring at 65 is not option.

Supporting sentences could include a few of the following details:

  • Fact: Many families now rely on older relatives for financial support.
  • Reason: The life expectancy for an average American is continuing to increase.
  • Statistic: More than 20 percent of adults over age 65 are currently working or looking for work in the United States.
  • Quotation: Senator Ted Kennedy once said, “Stabilizing Social Security will help seniors enjoy a well-deserved retirement.”
  • Example: Last year, my grandpa took a job with Walmart because he was forced to retire early.

The personal example might be something the writer wants to expand upon in a separate paragraph, one that tells a short story about the grandfather’s decision to go back to work after retiring. The point, however, would be expressed in the topic sentence from the previous paragraph.

Sometimes, though, the topic sentence presents one idea but in presenting the supporting details, the writer gets off topic. A topic sentence guides the reader by signposting what the paragraph is about, so the rest of the paragraph should relate to the topic sentence. Can you spot the sentence in the following paragraph that does not relate to the topic sentence?

Health policy experts note that opposition to wearing a face mask during the COVID-19 pandemic is similar to opposition to the laws governing alcohol use. For example, some people believe drinking is an individual’s choice, not something the government should regulate. However, when an individual’s behavior impacts others–as when a drunk driver is involved in a fatal car accident–the dynamic changes. Seat belts are a good way to reduce the potential for physical injury in car accidents. Opposition to wearing a face mask during this pandemic is not simply an individual choice; it is a responsibility to others.

If you guessed the sentence that begins “Seat belts are” doesn’t belong, you are correct. It does not support the paragraph’s topic: opposition to regulations. If a point isn’t connected to the topic sentence, the writer should tie it in or take it out. Sometimes, the point needs to be included in another paragraph, one with a different topic sentence.

Concluding Sentences

Tip

Don’t introduce new ideas in a conclusion.  It will just confuse the reader.

A strong concluding sentences draws together the ideas raised in the paragraph and can set the readers up for a good transition into the next paragraph. A concluding sentence reminds readers of the main point without repeating the same words.

Concluding sentences can do any of the following:

  • summarize the paragraph
  • draw a conclusion based on the information in the paragraph
  • make a prediction, suggestion, or recommendation about the information

For example, in the paragraph above about wearing face masks, the concluding sentence summarizes the key point: responsibility to others. The next paragraph in the essay might begin by stating something like, “Not all face masks, however, will protect people to the same degree.” The topic sentence connects the new point (which face masks are best at protecting others) with the point made in the previous paragraph (wearing face masks is a way to protect others).

Transitions

In a series of paragraphs, such as in the body of an essay, concluding sentences are often replaced by transitions. Transitions are words or phrases that help the reader move from one idea to the next, whether within a paragraph or between paragraphs. For example:

I am going to fix breakfast. Later, I will do the laundry.

“Later” transitions us from the first task to the second one. “Later” shows a sequence of events and establishes a connection between the tasks.

Tip

A transition can appear at the end of the paragraph or at the beginning of the next paragraph, but never in both places.

Look at this paragraph:

There are numerous advantages to owning a hybrid car. For example, they get up to 35 percent more miles to the gallon than a fuel-efficient, gas-powered vehicle. Also, they produce very few emissions during low speed city driving. Because they do not require gas, hybrid cars reduce dependency on fossil fuels, which helps lower prices at the pump. Given the low costs and environmental benefits of owning a hybrid car, it is likely that many people will buy hybrids in the future.

Each of the bold words is a transition. Transitions organize the writer’s ideas and keep the reader on track. They make the writing flow more smoothly and connect ideas.

Beginning writers tend to rely on ordinary transitions, such as “first” or “in conclusion.” There are more interesting ways to tell a reader what you want them to know. Here are some examples:

Purpose Transition Words and Phrases
to show a sequence of events eventually, finally, previously, next, then, later on
to show additional information also, in addition to, for example, for instance
to show consequences therefore, as a result, because, since
to show comparison or contrast however, but, nevertheless, although

These words have slightly different meanings so don’t just substitute one that sounds better to you. Use your dictionary to be sure you are saying what you mean to say.

Another Difference: Paragraph Length

How long should a paragraph be? The answer is “long enough to explain your point.” A paragraph can be fairly short (two or three sentences) or, in a complex essay, a paragraph can be a page long. Most paragraphs contain three to six supporting sentences, but as long as the writer maintains close focus on the topic and does not ramble, a long paragraph is acceptable in college-level writing. In some cases, even when the writer stays focused on the topic and doesn’t ramble, a long paragraph will not hold the reader’s interest. In such cases, divide the paragraph into two or more shorter paragraphs, adding a transitional word or phrase.

In an essay, a research paper, or a book, paragraphs separate ideas into logical, manageable chunks. Effective writers begin a new paragraph for each new idea they introduce. If paragraphs are still a mystery to you, or if you struggle to determine when to begin a new paragraph or how to organize sentences within a paragraph, you’re not alone. Saying what a paragraph is may not be that difficult, but writing a good paragraph is. When writing a first draft of an essay, it’s highly unlikely that you will write perfect topic sentences, strong support, and excellent concluding sentences for each paragraph or that you will organize all of the information in your essay so that it’s unified around specific topic sentences. That’s why good writers revise. They know that they will need to delete, add, and re-word each of their paragraphs so that they present their ideas in a clear and forceful manner.

 

Key Takeaways

  • Most college writing requires you to go beyond the basic five-paragraph essay structure.
  • A thesis statement needs to be sophisticated and focused.
  • Topic sentences express the main idea of the paragraph and usually appear at the beginning of a paragraph
  • Support for the topic sentences include details, examples, quotes, statistics, and facts.
  • Concluding sentences wrap-up the points made in the paragraph.
  • Transitional words and phrases show how ideas relate to one another and move the reader on to the next point.
  • The thesis and paragraphs in a first draft of an essay will always need to be revised

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